надо было заменить это слово синонимом, чтобы далее не было тавтологии, здесь надо показать лексическое разнообразие, common например
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Логическая
здесь должна быть запятая, вы свалили все в одну кучу
Лексическая
shool - данные из таблицы должны быть точными, (мало ли задач стоит перед подростком)
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Лексическая
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Лексическая
с точки зрения математики это будет percentage points
Стилистическая
стяженная форма
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Логическая
Outline a problem дано в задании, если вы говорите про несколько проблем, то надо указывать как минимум 2, а в задании нужна только 1.
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Старайтесь все-таки писать в заключении 2 предложения, кто-то из экспертов сочтет за логическую ошибку, т.к. абзац не может состоять из1 предложения, хотя у вас предложение распространенное
Еще немного, еще чуть-чуть и я буду гордиться твоими результатами.
Imagine
that you are doing a project on what topics teenagers in Zetland discuss at
school. You have found some data on the subject – the results of the
opinion polls (see the diagram below).
Comment
on the data in the diagram and give your opinion on the subject of the
project. Popular games and
songs 33%, School tasks and grades - 26% Fashion and gadgets - 19% Relationships
with parents and siblings - 14% Plans for the future 8%.
Make
an opening statement on the subject of the project work. Select and report 2-3
facts. Make 1-2 comparisons where relevant. Outline a problem that can arise
with communication with peers and suggest a way of solving it. Conclude by giving your opinion on the importance of communication with peers
for teenagers.
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It is well known that
every teenager likes to speak on different subjects. Doing a project on what
topics teenagers in Zetland discuss at school I have found a diagram with some
relevant data. I am going to analyse themexpress my opinion.
As can be seen from the
diagram, the most popular topics among teenagers are popular games and songs
andtasks and grades – 33% and 26% respectively. On the contrary, the least
popular theme is plans for the future, as only 8 percent of the respondents
have chosen this option.
According the data in
the diagram, teenagers also choose such topic as relationships with parents and
siblings (14%) and it is 5 percent less popular than fashion and gadgets (19%).
It demonstrates that adolescents don’t really want to talk about their family
relationships.
As far as I can see, a
few problems can arise with communication with peers. The main problem is that
everyone has different interests and this can often lead to conflicts. I
suppose that respect for the opinion of others can help to solve this problem.
In conclusion, I
strongly believe that communication with peers is very important for teenagers
because thanks to it adolescents can find understanding among people of their
own age.