The circus is the best entertainment for children?
Nowadays there are a lot of kinds of entertainment for both children and adults. For example, you can go to the theater and watch an interesting performance, go to the cinema or go to the shopping centre. But what is useful for your child? It’s very important question for all parents. Some people think that circus is the best leisure time for children while others believe that there are many different ways of spending children’s free time.
In my opinion, circus is a good place for people of all ages. Firstly, there are a lot of animals. I think that a child should broaden his mind and improve his knowledge about wild nature. Moreover, the little boys and girls get a great pleasure watching a performance. They can meet the
В заключительном абзаце должна быть эксплицитно выражена своя точка зрения, т.е. надо повторить свое мнение. В данном случае: "Я уверена, что цирк - хорошее развлечение для детей" или что-то в этом роде.
Опять артикли! Все грамматические ошибки из этого раздела, значит надо повторить его.
В целом, сочинение вполне достойное.
Успехов!