Public libraries are becoming less popular and they will soon disappear
Nowadays, people tend to argue about the need of public libraries. Some of them think that public libraries are out-of-fashion.
From my perspective, public libraries are the places which should not disappear. There are a lot of reasons why I think so. First of all, at library, you can meet a lot of intelligent and like-minded people, apart from reading books. Secondly, these days we use electronic devices too much, so reading rea
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3. В 3 абзаце вы даете 2 аргумента, а в 4 абзаце разбиваете только один. Это логика. Минус полбалла.
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