Some people think that in the future traditional shops will disappear and all shopping will be on line with home delivery.
Some people say that Internet shops are going to replace traditional ones. Some agree with this, others argue this isn't going to happen. I'd like to express my view on this. I suppose traditional shops aren't to be disappeared in the future. Firstly, it isn't always possible to try on the clothes you are going to buy when they are delivered. If it is, some people still feel uncomfortable about it. Also you cannot order many things and check if you like them after the delivery, the amount of stuff you order is often limited. I feel like internet shops aren't going to expand more than the traditional ones
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