Comment on the following statement: It's reported that billions of dollars are spent on space exploration projects every year. Some people believe that this money should be used to solve problems on Earth. What is your opinion? What problems should humanity solve first of all? Use the following plan:− make an introduction (state the problem)
− express your personal opinion and give 2–3 reasons for your opinion
− express an opposing opinion and give 1–2 reasons for this opposing opinion
− explain why you don’t agree with the opposing opinion
− make a conclusion restating your position
The problem of space exploration has always been very important for our society. Some people claim think that we must know how to construct the Universe. Others claim that the space does not effect on us.
In my opinion, space exploration is important. It helps us to form critical thinking based on science. Moreover, space exploration is perspetive. There are milliards mysteries in the Universe. There will always be something to discovery and explore.
On the other hand, some people argue that spending huge quantity of money is useless and unneccessary as humanity have no deal with the space. Furthermore, problems on Earth are more important than exploration. If we do not solve them quickly, it can cause
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