The use of mobile telephones should be restricted.
We use mobile phones everyday. But is it bad or dangerous to use them on a day-to-day basis. Let’s talk about that.
I personally think that mobile phones shouldn’t be restricted. Indeed, they are very useful. We can communicate wirelessly using them. I can call my friend from a train or even an airplane. Moreover, nowadays many mobile phones have access to the Internet. So people can work and receive the latest news using their phones.
But a lot of people think that it is necessary to get rid of mobile phones. In their opinion, these gadgets are very useful but they also emit microwave radiation that can cause many different illnesses and problems with your body. It is especially dangerous when you are talking and holding your phone near your head. Also, phones can be harm
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